Although the teaser isn't enough to tell whether the story will be good
or not, I *definitely* like your retranslation of the Laguna Blade
spell.  Besides being much cooler sounding, it has the advantage of not
sounding especially evil (in spite of being a black magic spell), and
thus isn't as likely to worry the Senshi.

-- 
my $n = 2; print +(split //, 'e,4c3H r ktulrnsJ2tPaeh'
."\n1oa! er")[map $n = ($n * 24 + 30) % 31, (42) x 26]

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