Elsa wrote:

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1829:

 Edmond Dantes opened his eyes slowly. The feel of
soft sheets and the slow rocking that was part and parcel of
travel by boat. His eyes confirmed this. The

think a semi-colon would work here.

 He could have sworn he was dead, drowned in the stormy
seas around the Chateau d'If, but it seemed he was still
alive

Unless one assumes the afterlife involved being in a ship cabin. :)

 The man's smile reassured Dantes. He could only smile
back ruefully.

 "I think I will not be returning in any case, 
monsieur." 

monsieur,

 The dark man said this with utter 

with such utter

sincerity that Dantes

could believe him. The man's eyes shone with the power of the
will behind them and

them, and

 > 

 "I have had many and will have many more. But for 
this moment, I am the Count of Monte Cristo."

Really must read that someday.

And you really must write the mainstory to this someday as well. :)

DB Sommer




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