And getting to more Janurary material:

I'll be going to bed now, awaiting your response.  I don't need to wake up
Sunday anyways, Giants were eliminated last week and I ain't up to hearing
that stoopid Jets chant again! *g*

Not for long after. :)

"I already found her," said a very stern Belldandy, once her sister walked
into the room. Belldandy and their new guest had already been home half an
hour before Urd and Skuld materialized back on Earth, and were expecting
them at the elder sister's insistence.

Parses awkward.

"Bell, I can explain--" Urd started to say, wearing a smile and a face she
knew how to wear a million times before, whenever she was found out.

"Shut up."

The two of them looked at her in stunned silence, startled at her sudden
response. Urd, especially, was unable to adjust, despite expecting it in
that very moment.

I don't know. In the early days, Bell used to get in magic duels with her.
^_^

---

Keiichi, from the second they arrived home, did exactly as he was told:

sit

in front of the television set and stay out of the impending storm.

A wise man.

He was

still not aware of how greatly he had underestimated the seriousness of it
all.

'it all' reads vague. Recommend 'of the situation.'

He was just happy that the motor club, after making up for lost time,

was still on schedule for tests on the new model in the following morning.

for the following...

"It's quite clear, isn't it?" the Assistant asked after taking a sip, "You
saw her last night. We all did. Goddess First Class Belldandy is obviously
not capable of handling what is happening to her."

"That's not true!" Keiichi quickly retorted, "Who are you to say anything
about Belldandy?"

Assistant: I am the Assistant. It's my job to say things like that. It's why
I was created.

Keiichi: Oh. Nevermind then.

Almost as immediately,

Urk. That sounds off. Reword.

the Assistant snapped back, "I have the authority,

Keiichi. I have every right, and it is my firm recommendation that

Belldandy

is a mess! Wild and uncontrolled emotional expressions, taxing physical
burdens, flaws in her decision making...and the absence of her powers,

just

to name a few! She is clearly not fit to discharge her duties. You are

very

lucky I don't decide right now to nullify your contract!"

I can't imagine current behavior would result in nullification of previous
agreements. She'd have to have proof that Bell had been also so unduly
influenced during the times of the contract bindings in order to nullify
them.

"Fine, deal with it how you want, but I'll stand by Belldandy if you don't

Belldandy, if

"C'mon, Belldandy!" the Assistant said, banging on the door to the

washroom,

"Get out here this instant!"

Keiichi walked by to notice her persist

reads awkward as well.

A pause, then a gasp before Belldandy said, "Keiichi?"

"Yeah. I made some tea, but it's getting cold, so if you want--"

"Please, I just need to be alone."

"Why? What's wrong, Belldandy? You can tell me."

"I'd rather not. Please, I'll be alright, just give me some time."

Has to get used to things like going to the bathroom. Oddly, even though she
was with a relief office, she never had to relieve herself. :)

Outside the room, the three of them stood frozen in time, as the occupant
inside resumed struggling with her hair and the task of straightening it
out. Her moans, obviously from the resistance of the tangles that refused

to

give, continued to be heard through the door. One simply walked away,
shrugging his shoulders. Another laughed, finally unable to hold it all

in.

A third pleaded with the other two, "That's not funny! Hey! Where are you
going? Why are you laughing?"

Heh

"Do you like it?" Belldandy asked, clearly blushing.

Keiichi stood and gazed with a look of astonishment. Her light-tinted

hair,

once delicately long, was now cut short to just above shoulders' length.
Whatever the compulsion, a new look accompanied a relatively new

Belldandy.

It does make sense.

"Ahem!" the Assistant said, once finding herself all of a sudden out of

the

conversation, "This ought to be proof enough for you, Keiichi. What other
impulses does Belldandy have for us next?"

Belldandy: I was thinking nipple  rings.

He considered the weight of the consequences and that what he did might

have

a huge effect on those consequences. Was the threat real, or was it simply
all a bluff? For sure, it had to be somewhere in between, so in any case,
perhaps something needed to be done. His heart, though, was telling him
otherwise, that it was best not to risk being conned into changing

something

that wasn't bad, but in fact good. All that mattered to Keiichi is that
Belldandy was happy.

Keiichi was Belldandy's happiness (sounds better to me)

"All that matters to me is that Belldandy is happy," he said.

And he just thought that. Might want to cut the thought all together.

"Tell me, then...that you love me enough to support me no matter what."

Heh. He would. Bell's done it often enough before this. He feels the same
way.

Nice work.

DB Sommer



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