Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Wed, 12 Mar 2003 02:26:46 -0500 Carrot Glace
<Carrotglace@mindspring.com> wrote:
The rest of this can be found at:
http://www.fanfiction.net/profile.php?userid=17205
Thank you for the URL.
Ah. I have returned yet again, however briefly. It's taking me much
longer to write things. It took almost two weeks for this chapter. ^_^;
I'm not giving up though! I continue onward!
I'm always glad to see more.
Things get worse.
When were they better? It's not like Carrot ever gets an even break
anyway.
Carrot was clinging to the side of a building ten stories above the
street. He was hidden away in a shadow as he looked down below him at
the bustle of the city. He found himself wondering if things were really
going to be as bad as he had thought.
Of course not. They are going to be much, much worse.
"I can't just hang here all day...can I?" It was starting {too : to} look like
a good idea actually. He could see most anything that would be coming
for him in the position he was hanging. A clear view of the sky and the
street stretched out before him. "That's not a bad idea." He seemed
quite pleased with his idea now and nodded too himself. "Great. I'll
just hang out here for a while."
Venom was leering at him as it chuckled at his predicament. "So,
Spiderman. What brings you here?"
Venom is developing a sense of humor. That sounds terrifying.
Carrot couldn't feel anything, there was no hint of danger in the
{things : thing's} tone as it glared down at him. It seemed almost amused in fact.
Venom had always set off his spider-sense before though. "What do you
want?"
"You're interesting," said the thing calmly. "We're starting to wonder
just what you're up {too : to}."
"Up {too : to}?" grumbled Carrot.
"Yes, you hate the Senshi, almost enough to want them dead. Yet you
still help them. Why?"
It does look that way from the outside. From our omniscent
perspective, we've seen enough to know he just wants them to leave him
alone. Possible Michiru most of all.
"Are you insane?!" muttered Carrot as he looked back at the thing.
"Sooner or later we'll catch you!" snarled the beast.
"Forget I asked," grumbled the boy as he turned a corner and shot
across the sky above another street.
It was a rhetorical question anyway.
Unfortunately, it was only the start of what was to become the busiest
day of his life.
Only Carrot could have getting beat up be the high point of his day.
It definitely sucks to be him.
Both Luna and Gia's eyes were locked on screen as the pair's lips grew
even closer. Suzuko still looked uncertain, and she seemed to almost
pull away from him.
"We interrupt this program to bring you an important news bulletin!"
What could possibly be more important?
"Oh," said Luna with a heavy sigh. "He probably won't feel much like
petting me when he gets back either. The jerk."
At least she has priorities.
I didn't spot Usagi becoming Venom.
The boy landed on the pavement once again and cursed. "Oh man. How much
worse can this get?"
"You should know better than to say that. It's bad luck," replied the
Goblin cheerfully as he hovered nearby.
My thoughts exactly.
"Now where were we?" said Venom as it turned towards Carrot again.
The boy simply swallowed and backed away a little more. "You were just
about to let me go?"
I suppose it was worth a try.
"Surprised? Forgot I've got wings already?" called the Goblin with a
cackle from overhead. "My, you're a tough one too! We'll have lots of
fun today!" He was on his glider again and turned away to start the
chase up again.
The fun Venom is having with Goblin should give Usagi more
understanding of Carrot's situation.
Every step he took towards the street felt heavier. His tasks just kept
mounting up. Now he had to fight Goblin, figure out a way to get Usagi
out of that thing, get the stupid bitch her powers back, avoid Kei, stay
out of the Yakuza's hair for a while and hope those other ninja didn't
get brave again, avoid Yakuza hitmen, get the cat's memories back, avoid
the violent Chinese National, find a way to get Kajura to leave him the
hell alone, find a way to get rid of his new and psychopathic
girlfriend, get rid of the freeloading Chinese National, find a new
apartment and get some damn solitude, and pick up Michiru by eight.
That is definitely a busy day. I'm going to have to reread the series;
I thought Michiru was his girlfriend. Not that he wants one.
"They don't care about us. We've served our purpose {too : to} them, and they
are keeping us around in case they might find a use for us. If that does
not destroy us, they will when this is over."
It was going to be a busy day at the Emergency {room : Room} at Tokyo General
Hospital. The news was on every television in the building almost.
Everyone was watching the terror unfold as the bomb-throwing madman
battled the inhuman monster. It was a plot worthy of a great film.
Explosions shattered buildings, raining debris into the crowded streets
below. Casualties were being reported. Police were unable to keep up
with the acrobatic battle, and choppers were still minutes away from the
scene.
"Oh no," muttered the woman as she turned to look down at the gurney an
emergency medical team had rolled in. There were four men pushing a red
mess of a {man blood : man. Blood} covered the sheets he was on.
"Don't worry, we'll make it stop," said the {Doctor : doctor} firmly as she
started putting on her protective clothing near to a sink by the door.
"Security?" muttered Dr. {Mizura : Mizuno} as she poked her head out the door.
"Wonder where they're going in such a rush?"
"Is something going on?" asked Ami curiously.
"I'm not sure," replied her mother. "It's probably nothing."
I'm pretty it should be Dr. Mizuno this time. I was originally unsure
whether it was Dr. Mizuno in the emergency room instead of Dr. Mizura.
"All right then!" snarled Venom as it jerked the still {taught : taut} lines
back suddenly.
"Eh?" said Goblin as he turned his head back. Two chunks of wall
slammed into {it : him} from behind and he jolted forward, knocked from his
glider again.
He paused and watched the tiny monsters battle below him. "I think I've
got it." With a heavy sigh he raised his hand. "God{: ,} I hope this works."
Well, it's been a while hasn't it? ^_^; Anyway. The next chapter is
about half written. Lots of fun stuff next time.
Sound good. I look forward to seeing it.