Finally getting to this.

Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Sun, 13 Jul 2003 10:30:47 -0400 DB Sommer <sommer@3rdm.net> wrote:

Akane's eyes bulged in fear as she found herself surrounded on all sides

by

lust-filled men. No way could she take that many guys, no matter how

horny

she was with abstaining for so long. "Won't someone save me?!" she

cried.

Finally back on script.

Of course. This was to be a pleasent dream. And an excuse for limey
fanservice.

A thunderous roar filled the air, causing the very ground itself to

tremble.

Suddenly the air was filled with flying bodies that were tossed about

like

leaves in a tornado. A hundred men were thrown back, left to soar

through

the air before crashing hard into the ground. Their bodies filled the

entire

length of the school yard, all of them groaning in various states of
senselessness.

Senselessness?  I thought that's how all that got started.

Nah. It makes sense, in a twisted way.

"Yes!" Akane cried out in a joyous delirium. "I'm yours! Do with me what

you

will!"

Parcheesi anyone?

Nah. That would be a nightmare, like Ranma was having.

Abruptly, the mauling stopped. In a high pitched, feminine voice, Kunou
asked, "Ranma, when you chest get so small?"

Lucky for Kuno it's a dream.  Unlucky for Shampoo.

Heh. Yes, and yes.

I do look forward to seeing more soon.

The good news: The rough draft is done. The bad news: Darn thing grew on me
(they always do) and it's taking me a while to revise. While it does what I
want it to do, I'm not as happy as I might be with it and it's light on the
lemon. Still, I wouldn't call it bad or dissatisfied. I'll let others read
it once it's posted and judge for themselves.

Thank for the comments.

DB Sommer

--
Mac :})
Give a hobbit a fish and he eats fish for a day.
Give a hobbit a ring and he eats fish for an age.


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