Like I could resist this.

"Oh but we have. You see, my name is Taida Osoi, heir to the Nemui
School of Martial Arts Lazyness!"

Ranma shouted, "Oh yeah, well I challenge you to a rematch right now."

Osoi said, "Fine."

Ranma fell to the ground and promptly lapsed into a coma.

Osoi whistled in appreciation. "Wow. Now that's lazy."

Ranma and Akane both fell to the ground.

Agree with Gary about axeing this part. Ending it with the punchline is
fine. One other thing as well. You'd be better off with Osoi being from the
martial arts school of 'Tardyness' or something. Fits a little better with
what he did, IMO.

But it brought a smile to my face. Nice work

DB Sommer

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