ECB: Ranma... needs to box his food and carry it out? Since when? He
eats like a speed demon on steroids. And he's been in there, what,
two-three minutes?
ECBRanma: Come on, I'm late for a fight and superspeed food isn't quite
fast
enough!
- That's true enough, but it's obvious that he's there to get food for more
then just him. Since the spat between him and Akane apparently ruined their
dinner, he's probably getting okonomiyaki for Akane to eat as well (though
what the rest of the Tendo residence is doing for food, I don't know. Maybe
Kasumi is making food for them, but Ranma and Akane have been banned from
the kitchen and dining room for the night.)
-It's not completely out of character, he has bought things for her before.
Ranma and Akane get food for each other on several occasions (and Ranma
actually eats it, if it's obvious that Akane didn't cook it), though I
think
you might have a point with the part where he asks Ukyo if he should get
Akane chocolates or flowers.
2 Okonomiyaki's do not serve the entire tendo family. Nor do I really see
him bringing her food to make up with her. If he had a spat over food, and
brought her a rival fiancee's food...she'd get more angry (rightfully so).
It's more of an indication that he's hungry. Especially as we see him in
the series chow down on those like they are barely there.
ECB: 19:50 hours, in military time that's 8 pm. Just setting the clock
here. And what's with the extraneous "oh-" in reciting the time?
That's normally there for the zero, not when it's after ten O'clock.
- Picky note. That's actually 7:50pm ^-^ Here's a hint for anyone who
doesn't have to deal with military time in their daily lives: if the time
is
13:00 to 24:59, simply subtract 12:00 from the number. For example, 22:45 -
12:00 = 10:45pm.
Yes, I rounded for simplicity. Which should be obvious by the context of
the comment ^^;
"--over sixty hours late. Bloody--" For a moment, honorable suicide
seemed like a favorable option to Tsumaranai. "Can't we get someone
else to take the part?"
ECB: Sixty Hours? No one noticed a lead actor being gone for sixty
hours? 3 days? Where was she anyway? The cops kept her... overnight?
For three nights? And no one noticed a thing. No one called. No one
paid any attention.
ECBTypopolice: I think he might have meant 'six' hours, sir!
ECB: Ah, but in that case the play would be running right now at 2 am.
No school play ever runs at 2 am. It would naturally remove 95 percent
of their customer base and designated audience to do so. So, even if it
is a typo for six, it's still retarded.
ECB: Get your coffee! Late Night School Play! See it at dawn!
- Okay, I know that when you are doing a mockery of a fic (also known as
MiSTing, to those who watch Mystery Science Theatre 3000), it is very
tempting to make the author look like an idiot at any given interval. But
did it not occur to you that the author maybe meant to write sixty minutes,
here? Picking at an error like this and ignoring all but the obvious
solution (that the writer probably meant to write minutes, not hours) just
makes it look like you're having a hard time coming up with things to pick
at.
Actually, this fic suffered from the reverse, with every single prereader
for this finding something else I missed in the initial pass through.
Anyhow, you pointed out an option I didn't even think of. Technically,
typo'ing the number is understandable, it's a single extra key and it
happens. It's not good, but it happens. Typo'ing the written word on the
other hand is odd. One doesn't expect to just see someone use the
completely wrong time word there. Especially as 60 minutes is an odd usage
in writing. It's far more commonly 'an hour' (or in this case 'more than an
hour late'). Given that he's indicating that it's more than that time
bracket, using minutes just seems entirely awkward there.
Dracos
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