Suggested changes: {before : after}
On Thu, 18 Sep 2003 07:20:30 +1000 Cheshire Grin
<cheshiregrin@iprimus.com.au> wrote:
The coming of the New Year had brought a change in classes and
witnessed the arrival of Miyazawa Yukino from class B into my class.
It wasn't a welcome change.
I didn't notice a classroom change in the anime. Maho and Yukino move
in different enough circles that Yukino could have easily ignored Maho
until their confrontation.
Standard school routine meant that the class rep was chosen as the
highest scoring student from the previous year. Until now, that had
always been me.
A girl with hair that was an unusual shade of red stepped forward.
Wouldn't that have been Arima? Or was this in the year prior to the
main story? I had the impression in the anime that Maho had been in
the same school as Yukino in junior high.
During this time, Takashi became somewhat of a {fixation : fixture}
in my life. I hadn't been seeing him long but I had begun to rely on
him more and more. The time I spent with him became an escape from my
collapsing reputation at school. He was in a different world than me,
he had long forgotten the worries of his school years and being with
him allowed me into that world. The amount of time I could spend with
him was brief however, and often eclipsed by my misery at school.
Yet during those few times, I was able to feel happy for a short
amount of time. I didn't realize how precious that time would soon
become.
Still, after I saw what Miyazawa did to Tsubasa Shibahime a few days
later I counted myself lucky. Thank god I didn't make her THAT angry!
That was definitely a memorable episode. It was so striking that it
overshadowed her early scuffle with Asaba.
[My babbling stopped as {: she} looked up at me. Her eyes. They were
so.. .. .. Sad. She probably thought I was a real jerk.]
{Ohhh, My head. Why am I on the floor? Memories came rushing back. A
guy knocked me over. I looked up at him. He was currently still
leaning over me and babbling apologies in my ear. He looked kinda
familiar. A sudden rush of anger brought me back to my senses.}
I don't think the [] and {} are necessary. There is enough context in
each paragraph to make it obvious who is thinking. Similar to the
spoken parts.
{My thoughts evaporated as we neared a station. Sansuka-cho. Huh?}
{We were on the wrong train.}
Oops. Nice touch.
We had decided after catching the wrong train that it wasn't worth
making our way back. School would just have to wait for another day.
I guess I must have got turned around when I crashed into Maho and
pushed us onto the train departing from the opposite platform.
Good to know how they got on the wrong train from the right platform.