Well, I admit it's quite a surprise seeing it's actually Mousse, but honestly, 
for a one-shot, it's kind of strange that, of all people, it's Mousse and 
Akane who marry.

Oh and, don't change the 'Cologne treated me like crap' part, it's OK. After 
all, Ranma WAS treated like such by her, so it doesn't spoil anything. On the 
other hand, maybe you should, since it inmediately eliminates every 
possibility except for Mousse and Ranma.

Now, my opinion on the story itself. Akane's a psych... *cough*... not nice 
girl, but even her deserves better than Mousse. :grin: Sorry, I'm not a big 
fan of hers. Anyway, the fic itself is OK, I just think it looks a bit 
out-of-the-hat, since you don't explain how Mousse did ever get to marry her 
without beaten to the afterlife and beyond by Ranma. Or how Shampoo didn't 
make Beijing duck of Mousse after kissing him.

Waait.. you did leave an open ending there.

"My stupid Mousse." *flicks out two kitchen knifes* <I knew 
Great-grandmother's sleep lipstick would work.>

--SLASH--

Couldn't resist the temptation. Hope I didn't offend ya. See, I even managed 
to keep lightsabers out of the picture. It wouldn't be very Ranma-like.

Ja!
~Antonio

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