This is something Keitaro would do, not Naru. Naru
either breaks
contact immediately or punches. Often both, but
never does she pull a
Keitaro, prolonging inappropriate physical contact
"by mistake."
Keitaro isn't in this fic. Why does Naru have to
take on the H
aspects of his character?

....

Go back and read the LH manga again before saying
things that make no sense.

{Noooo! He's going to have his wicked way with me!

And the worst

part is 
that it actually feels pretty good! Oh why do I

have to be such a

sucker
for this kind of forceful seduction right out of a

trashy romance

novel?}

Because this is Naru on lemon?

Because you've never bothered to actually pay
attention to the manga?

I repeat, don't try to lecture me on characterization
until you have read the actual manga.

"Miss Naru, is something wrong? I heard you cry

out from my room 

and...WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON HERE?!"

Then it really hit the fan as a tall girl in an

old-style kendo gi 

appeared on the scene.

As has been mentioned, wasn't Motoko out training?
Kitsune would have
no reason to think so unless Motoko had announced
it.

Let's see, Motoko's interests  at the start of Love
Hina can be summarized by...Martial Arts, Martial
Arts...and more Martial Arts. 

~~~~~~~~~~

Motoko doesn't use air pressure attacks. In the
manga she
specifically says she uses her ki, and I can't
recall any mention of
air pressure. Unless there's a reference I'm
missing, of course. ^_^

What do you think a Ki attack is?

Its energized air.
 

Yeah, even at the beginning of the manga, Motoko's
attacks are orders
of magnitude more powerful than Kuno ever gets.
Would Ranma mistake a
ki wave for a pressure wave? Assuming that Motoko's
sword attacks
have transit time, of course (not saying this is a
problem, since it
isn't clear). 

Similar techniques, orders of magnitude differences in
the skill and power.
 

This fic has a lot going for it, but I'm having
trouble getting
around all the gratuitous H-ness. Even by Love Hina
standards, this
is way over the top. Then there's the OOC-ness of
Naru. Why is she
channeling Keitaro and some swooning dime store
novel
maiden-in-peril? 

Consult vol. 10 of the manga and get back to me.

-Shade

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