Suggested changes: {before : after}

On Fri, 12 Dec 2003 11:17:31 EST JLee100441@aol.com wrote:

Here's the next part of Red String of Fate.  It just {seem : seemed}
to get done first.  Anyway{: ,} please send C & C to
JLee100441@aol.com

Thanks{: ,} James

He must have been the most handsome man Megumi had ever seen.  All
thoughts of calling an ambulance instantly vanished.  She decided right
then and there that she would take care of the boy herself.  After
all{: ,} her apartment was right there and much closer than the
hospital.  All she had to do was carry him {home : in}.  Thus she
grabbed a hold of the boy.
"You're in my apartment.  You had fallen and {was : were} knocked out,
so I brought you inside."  {: }Ranma was taken back by the girl's
kindness.  Most the people he knew would have left him there or tried
to take advantage of his weakness.  "Thank you."

"I-I just ate lunch, sorry."  Answered Megumi looking down.  It was
just her luck that she had a big meal before coming home.  Maybe a nice
romantic ride.  "{You : Do you} want a ride home{.  : ?}"

"Hey Gumi, {I : I'm} going to get your brother and his friends some
ice {cream why : cream.  Why} don't you help me carry it," said Ranma
in a somewhat tense voice.  Megumi nodded and started to follow Ranma.

"Urd, can you {removed : remove} this enchantment?"

"Here's your ice-cream," said Megumi handing a cone to her brother.  As
she did so, Keiichi noticed that she was now rather nervous.  Had Ranma
threaten her?  He also noticed that both Ranma and Megumi had placed
themselves between him and the {Goddesses : goddesses}.

"Yes, ki is a {persons : person's} life-force.  Everyone on this beach
is emitting ki."  Ranma turned back to Belldandy.  "Everyone that is,
except you."

"But I'm your sister{: ,} damn it!"  Megumi yelled.  She stopped when
Ranma placed his hand on her shoulder.  He didn't like the fact that
Keiichi had lied to his sister, but he could understand somewhat.

--
Mac :})
Give a hobbit a fish and he eats fish for a day.
Give a hobbit a ring and he eats fish for an age.


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