David Johnston wrote:

DB Sommer wrote:

Instead, revenge could take the form of assigning them to undercover

work in

'The Blue Oyster' bar, a known pick-up place for homosexual men. The

suave

What, is it franchised?

Heh. It has a certain degree of infamy. It's why I like to use it. Someone
else mentioned I used the Bathhouse branch for where Soun worked in 'Things'
in his halcyon days of youth.

"And we do pro-bono legal cases from time to time, as in this instance,"

the

man who had shown the business card said as he returned it to his jacket
pocket. "We demand the  release of two innocent civilians that have been
illegally detained by you jack-booted thugs: Hiroshi Karigari and

Kyosuke

Kasuga."

This must be the alternate Japan with habeus corpus.

Heh.

It took a moment for the sergeant to recall the names. "You mean

Mentello

Mentallo.  Do a global search and replace.

Argh! I made that mistake back in chapter 7 as well.

"They were confused from concussions they sustained after having been
assaulted by two criminals, who, I might add, you never bothered to
interrogate, let alone arrest, for their felonious acts. You can be

assured

our clients will be suing for that as well. Now release them," the head

Shouldn't there be a comma after "that"?

I don't think so. I could be wrong, though.

Another shouted out, "Also you need to cease and desist with the

violations

of Mentello's rights and remove the torture device hooked up to him."

Oops.  He just admitted that whosisface is Mentallo.

Oops. The writer's bad. Will change to Kasuga.

as far as he could without falling off.

Looking forward to more chapters.

If I ever get the time to write them. And to make matters worse, I had a
moment of inspiration/madness where I *might* do a brief side story to this
that deals with the Azu cast and some other Marvel characters meeting one
another. So that might come out before the rest of the chapter, since it's
real short 20k or less, and very linear. We'll see.

Azumanga, can't get it outta my mind.

Thanks for the comments.

DB Sommer






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