"Dro'gan, called NiteFlier" <drogan_niteflier@earthlink.net> writes:
Disclaimer: Once character (at least) copyrighted by Naoko Takeuchi, Toei
Animation, and Kodansha. I'm still not idiot enough to claim her! Some
elements were taken from the game Lords Of Magic, copyright Sierra Games
and Impressions Studios.
It'd be somewhat nice to give a hint as to the SM cross somewhere,
even if just in the author's notes at the end of the story :-)
It wasn't obvious to me at all when I first read the story.
I took solace in animals where I could not find it in my own kind. One
of our stable sauruses took great liking to me, and the stablekeeper
sauruses looks a bit wrong to me. A few minutes googling suggests that
sauri might be the proper pluralization, but 'saurs' also seems used.
grudgingly allowed me to ride him around the paddock occasionally. But
that bit of fun was taken away when I was seven springs old, for Ardan
came into the stable one day and claimed Rhodan as his own. I was never
able to ride him after that, but did remind the saurus quite frequently
with carrots and other treats.
remind it of what?
But I can claim intelligence enough that I did not wander off into any
occupied dens or warrens, although deserted ones aplenty did I explore.
Too, I made friends with the travelers that came to Winged Haven, and
learned more of Urak than was possible sitting indoors studying. Always
I gave the name "Chrys" to them, so that they might remember me. Too,
Fire dwarf: My name's Gimli.
Chrys: That's going to cause a little confusion. Mind if we call you
'Chrys' to keep it clear?
The first day I was there, I was striped of my possessions and clothes
stripped
It was a shock to me, as well. Even though I was an outcast of my
in ?
Two minutes later I was passing brooms out to the older girls, and
handing the younger ones rags and telling them to fill up buckets with
water and soap and follow behind the sweepers and scrub. The mattresses
of the beds had no sheets, but that was rectified a half mark later when
several downtrodden girls a few years older than myself came to the door
and set packages of them inside.
I was curious as to why the girls were so... lifeless. They would not
Possible confusion between all the girls (which includes the other new
kids) and just the older girls.
We were set to jobs and tasks by our overseer, a Priestess who had
obviously not had to climb many stairs laden with burdens or run around
cleaning and ordering things. I know, for she made us do it.
But it occurred from that, something that got me mad.
That seems a little at odds with the slightly stilted speech she's
been using so far.
One of the youngest of us, Adel, had been tasked to ferry a item of
fragility from our obese keeper to another Priestess, yet despite its
nature it was quite heavy, too heavy for a child to keep steady.
despite its nature?
The
direct result of this had Adel back in the Priestess's study, with those
of us copying things looking on.
The Priestess berated Adel for a quarter of a mark, each insult to her
self and her heritage driving Adel's self worth down visibly. I had
gotten mad at this within the first minute, but when the bloated worm
raised her hand to strike the child I found that I hadn't reached the
level of anger needed to deal with her.
And this sentence didn't quite work.
But I did attempt to follow the scrolls instructions, but all I was able
to do was to center myself, and feel my own talent inside of me. Later,
Two buts
It took from me.
It took from me that special spark, that private piece, that part of me
that was mine alone to give...
Yet it took it from me without me giving it.
>From the arch stepped a Unicorn, and the Priestess laid her hands on its
neck, and led it away, taking the power from the room.
It did not even glance at me, who had it had taken innocence from.
whom
Nice scene.
"'Tears are needed, but cry not rivers for the parted.
need end quote
* * * * *
Halthre called me into the study the next day before the others had
gotten there to begin scribing down documents as she had done since she
I believe it'd be 'scribing documents'
She turned away, not expecting an answer. "I think that you've gone too
far.
Need end quote
Overall, I enjoyed the fic. At first I had a hard time getting into it
(as I've no experience with the setting at all), but I was drawn into
it as the character's voice felt consistent. The first person present
tense that the fic was mostly presented kept me a little distant from
the action, but by the end it seemed to be flowing pretty well.
The unicorn scene was particularly memorable.