Rereading it, I have to agree. I need to expand it quite a bit.  I need 
to show some of their feelings, from  their point of view or at least so 
the reader can share them.
Thanks for the help, hopefully I can use it to change this from a scene 
to a chapter.

-- 
Rick Robinson
RICHARDROBINSON@prodigy.net


If violence is not solving your
problems you're just not using enough of it.

				 Misato

"I guess I'm just an old-fashioned sentimentalist at heart.  I refuse
 to accept a no-win scenario.  I hate the thought of a universe without
 justice.  If the maneuverings of dark powers can't be exposed and
 defeated by the pure of heart, then there's no point in anything.  I
 can't believe that."
                               -- Benjamin Hutchins




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