At 03:13 PM 7/8/2004 -0500, David Taylor wrote:
okay I must have missed something, I've reread all 10 and both SS
and I still can't find the connection between Hotaru's and Ranma's family
The clues have been scattered through the chapters, starting all the way
back in chapter 2. Take another look at the scene where Seiko is trying to
comfort Aiko in her study when they all think Ranma had been killed. More
hints pop up in subsequent chapters.
Anyway one problem I'm having is the treatment of the Tendos by the police
I'm fully aware of the difference between the American and Japanese
police, (I was in the US Navy
and spent a lot of time in Yokosuka and Sasebo), but my point is if the
police finally took action at
the Emperor's "request" they would be very careful how they went about it
with everything fully documented
and demonstratively "above board".
Perhaps a change so that the "body cavity searches" took place in a
Police Station and fully video taped with multiple witnesses...
still within the letter of the law but extremely humiliating
I did those scenes with malice aforethought. Chapter 10 fills the reader in
a bit more on just which unit the good lieutenant belongs to ("OCU").
Also note, the fact that the police did *NOT* tread lightly on the Tendos
should be a BIG clue that something went seriously wrong *somewhere* along
the chain. The JNID agents' conversation outside Ucchan's in ch9 was
certainly a strong indication of this.
Just my to cents worth
Keep up the great work!
Dave
Thanks, and thanks for writing!
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