Shoot. Almost missed this one. Sorry about that:

Well, something short and sweet this time...

Rough draft version was completed today. It'll need several hours of 
revision time, when my mind is clear, since revisions always take their toll 
on me. Should have it out in the next few days, ideally.

Prologue

Manabu and Kobashi exited the bar, feeling pretty damn good about
themselves as they leaned against one another in a drunken stupor.

(shrugs) Have you ever considered writing original stuff? And not just the 
Ammadeau-like pseudo-anime, Japanesey orig fiction, but your very own... 
stuff.

I've considered it, but haven't settled on an idea yet that I think will be 
a real winner. I'd just as soon go with my best shot rather than something 
half-assed.

I'm just curious, since you've written so many fics that maybe you can 
finally go full circle and write something that's not just fanfiction... 
because you're one of the few authors which I could stand to read the 
non-main-character parts of their fanfiction.

One shot one scene characters tend to be easy, IMO. You give them a little 
window dressing, have them serve their one purpose, then never touch them 
again. :)

OTOH, this may have come from an anime I've never heard of, but it only 
goes to show how advanced your writing skills are for me to not tell 
whether a character is from some anime or is a fanfic character.

No, they're originals. They help set the stage for establishing Urd's coming 
to Midgard and that she'll turn people who think they can have their way 
with her to stone .

They
sang loudly and off key, causing passersby to give them a wide berth
rather than having their ears assailed in such a painful way.

They should have gone to a karaoke bar.

Too confining. They wish to share their joy with the world.

Likewise,
the men's reputation as members of one of the most violent local street
gangs meant no one would tell them to keep it down. The men might meet
the request halfway by ripping the person's ear off so they wouldn't
have to hear the racket.

Well, they certainly are considerate.

And to imply they'll be getting what's coming to them, to a degree.

"Who can't use more of them?"

Kobashi considered that. "Rich gay guys."

Ah sou. And he just had to answer that, eh? Classic DB wit. :)

Well, it's true.

"We'll help them with directions." Manabu fingered the knife tucked in
his belt. Hidden as it was underneath his shirt, he had used it to great
effect in times past. Wielding a sharp knife tended to make people see
things your way, especially when it came to economic redistribution.
Kobashi was very much in favor of that, and cutting out the government
as a middleman in the process.

They have interesting political views. Apparently, thugs in Japan are a 
cultured and educated lot.

You can have brains and still be a thug at heart.

The woman spoke in a throaty purr. "I see thou hast impeccable taste
when it comes to beauty. However, there is but one of myself and two of
thee. Perhaps it would behoove thee to discuss amongst thyselves who is
the more worthy of my attentions."

Eyng? What's with the strange speech pattern? Also, is she still speaking 
in 'Japanese' to the two men, and if it is Japanese, is it formal Japanese 
for it to be 'translated' in such a way.

Asgardians apparently can magically speak any Midguardian language, at least 
I'm pretty sure Thor can speak any such tongue. And blame the speech pattern 
on Stan Lee, he's the one that went with the faux Shakespere as the dialect 
they use.

Don't mind me. I'm just curious.

With the kiss delivered, she slipped out of his grasp and admired her
handiwork. "Truly thou should be grateful, for after one kiss from Urd,
the Enchantress, thy mortal life would be meaningless from that point
onward. Now thou can enjoy the moment for the rest of eternity."

Urd laughed to herself as she strode from the alley, leaving the statue
of Wataru Kobashi behind.

Cool prologue. You should do more of these in your stories.

Only when I need them. While they help set the stage, I don't always need 
them, though. One thing I in being minimalist is that I don't write 
unneccesary things. Sometimes I don't write necessary things. :)

Sorry for the lack of a response and lack of grammar corrections. It's 
good. Can't wait for the rest. Keep on writing.

Abdiel


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