"I can take it," Nabiki insisted. "Really, I'm enjoying it.
Just takes a lot out of me, that's all."

   

That part was perfectly engineered to point us in the exact wrong direction.
My hat to you.

 

Thanks. It was fun to write.

He flipped up a few skirts as he bounced through a crowd of
girls waiting at a crosswalk, surveying the panties with a
connoisseur's {?}eye, then sped on down the street.

   

Having read many stories, I find myself faced with a dilemma with this word.
Being french, my inner self tells me that the right word is 'connaisseur',
meaning 'one who knows' mostly in specific art forms. However, the sheer
number of times I have seen this word in use point towards the fact that it
might be part of the English language. Correct if not so.

 

I'm happy to change it. I trust a native speaker more than
my dumbass spellcheck program.

"I mean," she continued, "that I will be looking over these
children now. They a {are} sort of family now... important to the
future of my people. If you escalate the feud with the Tendous
or the Saotomes now, it will become quite ugly. The
consequences will be bad for all of us... including you."
   

All around, a fitting epilogue to the great saga that has been Relentless.
great work all around.

Are you sure, though, that only another epilogue is needed ? There
seems to be more 'loose ends' than the single remaining chapter could
cover.


 

I deliberately left quite a few loose ends, especially for
the gang that stayed back in Japan. I felt this was in 
keeping with the original... plus, I just like the notion
that life will go on and be full of strange adventures for
the Ranma gang after I finish writing the story.

Thanks for the C&C!
Grayson Towler
http://www.talesfromthevault.com/relentless 



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