Okay, since I bitched about the floodposting, and since this actually is not
that badly written a story, I might as well go ahead and do the C&C thing.
The... incident... at Joketsuzoku
You WIN the Spelling Bee Prize for being one of the less than 5% of all
Ranma fanfic writers to actually spell this RIGHT.
Tears of a father who deeply and truly regretted the actions that
had cost his son so much poured unhindered down Genma's grief
stricken face.
Wow, Genma showing remorse for his own actions--this really IS an alternate
universe.
They had said that the Nyannichuan would have turned Ranma
into a girl had Jusenkyo not found him worthy of a higher purpose...
DAMN THEM! A girl would have been much better than this!
Genma looked down at the sapphire lens clenched tightly in his fist.
"Don't worry Ranma... Surely one of the Tendo girls will be able to
activate you and release you from your token..."
O_o
Not wanting to announce to half of Tokyo and Nerima
Okay, stop right there.
This is one of my biggest pet peeves in fanfics, right here.
Folks, Nerima is not some random city outside of Tokyo. It's a ward of
Tokyo. A fairly major one, in fact.
You see, Tokyo is divided into wards, much like New York City is divided
into buroughs. Nerima is analogous to Brooklyn or Queens. Not a city to
itself, but a distinctive part of one.
Ranma 1/2 is largely set in the Fuurinkan district in Nerima ward. This is
analogous to, say, a particular 5-city-block region of Brooklyn.
If you want to get a good idea of how Tokyo and the surrounding areas are
REALLY laid out, I recommend checking out Google Earth (earth.google.com).
Have we got that? Okay? Okay. Moving on...
Genma sighed at the memories that showed even more things
for him to regret as a father. That and the fact that he was even
considering selling Ranma's token showed him that he still had
far to go if he really wanted to atone for the actions that had
cost his son so much.
A panda can't change its spots that quickly, after all...
"What? Did Ranma send us a slimy gel packet?" Akane asked
skeptically, noticing her sister's reaction. She reached over to
grab the thing out of Nabiki's hand, which prompted the middle
Tendo daughter to close her hand around it and draw it
protectively in towards her bosom.
Which is when things really began to get freaky!
...a bit of an "unprofessional" line of narrative, that...
Light shined from the stone clutched in Nabiki's fist, a bright
aura that cast the room in shades of blue. Nabiki's kimono,
indeed, everything she had on at the time, down to the light
make up she had on in order to provide a good impression,
flowed into the sapphire lens as if it were all water.
Uh-oh...henshin sequence.
"What the!?" Exclaimed Akane, as she pulled back rapidly,
having lost the right sleeve and a portion of the upper torso
of her own kimono to the effect. Not to mention half her bra
and her own make-up.
Well, never seen someone else get partially henshined before. @_@
*snip description of Nabiki's magical girl outfit* Niiiiiice. That'll be
great to see fanart of...oh! There is art. Sweet.
It was small, about the size of a cat or rabbit, covered in blue
fur, and looked kind of like a kangaroo rat.
"Um... Hi, I'm Ranma," it said. "Sorry 'bout this..."
*SNRK*
OMAKE THEATER PRESENTS: Pest Control...
"Right," Nabiki muttered, "That's the fifth blue mouse-type
we've gone through. Casting said that we wouldn't be getting
another one after this until Akane had some therapy. Who's
stupid idea was it to put her through the Nezumi-Ken anyway?"
"Why is everyone looking at me?" Genma asked nervously...
*SNRK*
SPECIAL TREAT - FFML EDITION:
Ranma in his base form in this fic:
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Guardian_Ranma_01_by_Reiko_Foxx.jpg
O_O;; He's a freakin' Pokemon!
Ranma cocked a furry little eyebrow at this. "Um... Could somebody
run that by me again? It sounded like my Pop brought me over to
meet some girls I'm supposed to marry, except that I can't while I'm
in this form..."
"Oh dear," Kasumi responded softly. "I do believe that is actually
the case, Ranma-san."
"Oh," Ranma responded flatly. "I see." And then the rather large
mouse fainted.
"Piiiikaaaaaaaaaaaaaa......." *THUD*
Nabiki blinked and suddenly wished that she had a mirror handy to
examine herself with. She was somewhat surprised when water
flowed out of the sapphire in the silver and steel fittings on the
back of her right hand, forming into a flat plane with a somewhat
fancy border and handle, which suddenly froze solid. And then
fell to the floor, shattering into ice chips.
"Really, Nabiki," Kasumi chided gently. "If you are going to use
your magical girl powers to make things like a hand mirror, you
should be ready to catch them before they break."
*SNRK* Good ol' rock-steady Kasumi. XD
OMAKE THEATER PRESENTS: Not quite the battle Ranma
thought he was destined for...
"Get your's now! Prices as shown, or reasonable fees negotiable
for custom work!" Nabiki yelled from her carnival stall.
"Um... Nabiki?" Ranma tried to get the attention of his excited ward.
"Beat the heat! Custom ice scuptures! Frozen treats! Made by
magic before your very eyes!"
"Nabiki, I really think that I was given this form so that the girls I
empowered could fight Youma, not make a profit..."
"Get your's today!"
XD
SPECIAL TREAT - FFML EDITION:
Nabiki Tendo as a Magical Girl - Two pics:
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Girl_Nabiki.jpg
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Girl_Nabiki_Bust.jpg
Oooh. Quite sexy.
Ranma woke to find himself curled up in a whicker basket padded
It's spelled without an 'h', incidentally. Wicker.
with some nice soft blankets. Which, while a nice surprize in and
Surprise. No Z.
Kasumi and Akane were looking on in awe as their sister experimented
with what Kasumi had dubbed as her "Magical Girl Powers". Nabiki
had formed a new ice mirror, a standing one large enough for all three
sistes to be shown together this time. Elegant ice sculptures graced
the family room here and there, along with the occasional weapon
made entirely of ice. At the moment though, Nabiki was poking her
hands into a large sphere of water she had called up, concentraiting
on keeping it floating like a bubble in the air while boiling the inside.
Fast learner, that one.
"My hands!" Nabiki screamed. "What happend to my hands!?"
For when Kasumi began wrapping up her forearms and the ball,
the thin layer of frost had been brushed away, revealing crystal
clear ice.
And nothing else, save for a solitary sapphire disc suspened in the
ice about where the back of Nabiki's right hand should be....
Okay, weird...
"Hey, no problem," Ranma chided. "For someone who just got magical
powers, I think you've adapted rather quickly! You should be proud of
yourself!"
"And how many Magical Girls have turned their own hands into ice,
hmm?" Nabiki asked, cocking an eyebrow at the fuzzy blue kangaroo
rat.
Hey, it's a fair question.
"So any girl could become a magical girl as long as she can activate
that blue disc?" Akane asked.
"Nabiki?" Akane turned to her sister, eyes pleading for permission.
Nabiki extended her right hand...
Akane reached out to touch the gem...
and there was a raging inferno!
Big surprise THERE. XD
OMAKE THEATER PRESENTS:
Akane reached out to touch the gem...
BEEP "Please deposite two game tokens" BEEP
"Darn!" Akane muttered. "I knew I shouldn't have used them all up
playing Sailor Io in all of those crossovers!"
*SNRK*
Fire raged in the family room of the Tendo home, a blazing column of
flame that consumed the clothes from Akane's floating form in an
instant. Along with the table, part of the floor and ceiling, and most
of Kasumi's kimono.
Ooooooops.
The fact that Kasumi was apparently uninjured was noted by Nabiki,
although she wasn't sure whether that was because Akane's fire
couldn't hurt her sisters, or because Kasumi was out in the yard,
having been carried their by a now eight foot long (not counting the
tufted tail), giant sabertooth kangaroo rat with blue fur.
Ranmachu evolved into Fangarat!
"Eep!" Akane landed awkwardly but unharmed on the somewhat
charred ground below the Tendo house. Sitting up, she noted that
she now had her own Magical Girl costume. It was very similar to
Nabiki's, being what appeared to be biker shorts and a sleaveless
sleeveless
Akane looked around, noting to her chargin the amount of damage
her transformation had caused. Then she noticed Kasumi in the back
yard, mostly naked and hanging tightly to the very large, very shaggy,
and very dangerous looking blue furred sabertoothed kangaroo rat
that was carrying her close to its chest....
I wonder if Akane's "smash the hentai" instincts extend to magical guardian
beasts...
Ranma, for his part, was starting to feel somewhat embarassed. Mostly
due to the state of Kasumi's attire (or rather, her current lack of same),
but partly for not considering the possible side effects of the various
elemental transformations. Granted, he had no way of knowing what
Akane's elemental affiliation would have been ahead of time, nor had
he actually seen Nabiki's transformation, or even Shampoo's for that
matter. On one level, he was dead certain that none of the
transformations were supposed to be that dangerous and out of
control, but on another level he couldn't say why he was so sure
that this was not normally the case.
Akane's just that much of a screwup at everything she does...
Except that Kasumi was having none of that! She continued to cling
tightly to this large, furry (and not in the least bit on fire) guardian
that had rescued her from being burned alive by her youngest sister.
"My furry hero..."
Kasumi began sobbing into Ranma's shaggy azure fur out of a feeling
of shock and intense relief.
Awww.
Being grabbed by her shoulder from behind, spun arround, and
slapped by Nabiki was not part of Akane's planned sequence of
events.
Akane could use a whole lot more of that, if you ask me...
"Enough!" Ranma interupted Nabiki's angery tirade. "It was an
accident. None of the transformations are supposed to cause this
much incidental damage. Not even fire, not that I had any idea what
her elemental affinity was going to be. This was just a stupid, scary
accident, and nobody was actually hurt, so enough already!"
*applauds*
"Um..." Ranma started in halting embarrassment. "Can I put you
down now?"
"..." Kasumi burried her face in the azure fur covering Ranma's chest.
That would be a no.
"Well?" Ranma asked again, plantively. Or as plantively as an
eightfoot tall sabertoothed kangaroo rat with blue fur and sapphire
eyes could.
"No."
Ranma would have joined Akane and Nabiki in their collective
facefault had it not meant possibly injuring Kasumi in the process.
Heh.
Hikaru Gosenkugi was angry, depressed, and, well... mostly
Gosunkugi
depressed really. It wasn't like anger ever did him much good. When
it came to classic fight or flight responce, his adrenal system was
every bit as pathetic as the rest of him, failing him when he needed
it the most.
Well, better his *ad*renal system than his *renal* system...
What he needed was a protector, someone strong, who was able to
strike fear in others, and could back it up. And yet at the same time
be caring and gentile. This was part of the reason he had fixated on
Akane, who was normally such a sweet person, and yet was able to
bull her way through thirty or forty boys at the start of every school
day for the past month. Not that he thought about it in such an
analytical fashion. He just felt a longing, nearly instinctive, need for
Akane.
Unfortunately for him, the rest of the world would view it as a sick,
twisted obsession.
R'hul had two arms, two legs, a head with two eyes, all roughly
where they should be for a human and certainly close enough to
pass for human in a dark alley in the middle of the night.
However, as it was still early evening, there was still far too much
light to effectively hide its less human features, like the sharp talons
on its hands, and tentacles on its face. Many tentacles. Way too
many tentacles, where the nose and mouth should be.
Ewwwww.
Tentacles that R'hul now extented from its 'beard' toward the
unfortunate gang of boys.
R'hul had need of them...
Gah! Tentacle faggotry!
SPECIAL TREAT - FFML EDITION:
Akane Tendo as a magical girl - Two pics
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Girl_Akane_0.jpg
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Girl_Akane_Bust.jpg
Niiiice. She'll look better when the hair gets chopped off, though.
But first, R'hul thought that it should do something about its
infiltration form...
Yeah. The Cthulu look is SO last millenium...
"Right. I'll bring them back to the family room unless they're too far
along, okay?" Akane wasn't looking forward to facing her father after
causing so much damage to the house, but she figured that Nabiki
had a point in getting the hystrionics over with.
histrionics
"That's fine," Nabiki agreed. "In the meentime, I'll try to get Kasumi
meantime
"Lots of luck, Nabiki," Akane commented as she turned to head
through the house towards the Dojo. "I don't think she wants to
give up her giant cuddle-toy." As she left the family room and
passed the kitchen, she muttered to herself. "Freaking scary
looking cuddle-toy as big as a car..."
heheh.
Still, perhaps she could get some material and make some plushies.
She's have to see if Ranma would be willing to model for her.
*facefault*
"Oh my!" Kasumi exclaimed, finally holding Ranma's dazed form
away from her chest as she looked at him with concern.
"Way to go, Sis," Nabiki chided as she poked Ranma. "I think you
broke him."
Nah, he just needs new batteries...
Ranma stared intently at his father, appearing to think deeply on all
that Genma had just said. After a moment, the large blue kangaroo
rat seemed to come to a conclusion. "Alright. Who are you and what
did you do with my Pop?"
*snrk*
R'hul examined its current domecile, the home of the feral humans'
pack alpha. Surprisingly the young adult had still been living with
his parents, but they were easily taken care of. Nothing permanent
yet, as they might still be needed to maintain his cover. Just a couple
of temporary transformations to keep them causing problems over
the short term. Both were now boneless blobs of flesh, homogenous
and self contained, without any external features save for their skin.
Capable of remembering what they were and thus quite able to
radiate satisfactory amounts of terror.
Ewww, nasty.
Good furnature was so hard to find, and seats that could supply
furniture
a fresh sense of personal horror were even more difficult to come
by back home. These two would simply have to be taken back to
its estate once their purpose here had been served.
Ewwwwwwwww.
Humans had come to catalogue their darker natures, displaying their
fears and perversions in visable records for all to see. Trully an
visible
excellent guide for the conisior of the soul.
connossieur
All in all, with its minions dutifully spreading their 'tag' hither and
yon, R'hul decided to kick back and enjoy some quality lesure time
leisure
Nabiki was not particularly surprised to discover that her halter top
also felt like bare skin to her hands. Cupping her breasts in her hands,
which certainly felt like direct skin to skin contact to Nabiki, she
raised
them to her face, which was bent forward as far as her neck would
allow. From this close perspective she could compare her glove, which
definitly looked like smooth material to her eyes, to her halter, which
looked equally smooth. She could even easily tell where her nipples
where due to the fact that the material followed the contours of her
skin so closely.
Mm, nipples.
A quick thought made her check the groin area of her shorts, but
Nabiki was relieved to note that whatever made the rest of the
strange material follow her bodies contours so closely everywhere
else fit that area like a leotard instead. Like a second skin, yes, but
without following that particular topological fold.
Darn.
...
Okay, so she had a perfect wedgie that she couldn't feel.
*nosebleed*
Wandering over, Nabiki was sleightly disappointed that Akane had
slightly
"Yeah," Akane agreed unsteadily. "That seems like a good idea.
Let's go ask Sensei!" Nodding with more determination, Akane
moved to head out the door, apparently without any concern about
being topless.
"Sensei?" Nabiki cocked an eyebrow at that, but turned to head
for the guestroom before Akane could answer.
Nodding with more determination, Akane moved to follow her
sister out the door, apparently without any concern about being topless...
You have that sentence twice.
"So, tell me, Mr. R'hul," the father began as his wife served his favorite
terriaki eel. "How did you meet my son?"
teriyaki
R'hul, for its part, just cursed his luck at the fact that its lead
minion's
parents were C'thulhu's Witnesses...
*SNRK*
SPECIAL TREAT - FFML EDITION:
Ranma's really really big sabertoothed kangaroo rat form!
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Guardian_Ranma_02_by_Reiko_Foxx.jpg
Scary! O_O;;
R'hul kicked back and sucked on a bottle of ketchup as its impromptu
Godzilla marathon continued into the next morning. From the first one
done in a monochromatic medium of black, white, and grey, through
to the colorful smash-fests of the current day, R'hull was enjoying
every moment of them all. Alien and its sequil, Aliens, had been
sequel
Kasumi apreciated the help that the Saotomes where giving her this
appreciated, were
can figure it out. I take it from the three armed kimono that Nabiki
doesn't have a complete handle on returning to normal yet?"
Heh!
Ranma blushed at the memory of the two girls powering down for
the first time. Akane's power had flickerd and then guttered out
suddenly, leaving her not only topless, but completely naked.
Every magical girl's worst nightmare.
...well, that, and tentacle youma...
Nabiki's own power seemed to drain away as her odd hair and eye
coloration reverted to normal, with her costume dispersing as a fine
mist. Moments later, her kimono had reformed out of this same mist,
only with make-up stains and a third arm from what was presumably
the section of Akan'e's attire that had gotten caught up in things.
Even her bra had acquired an extra cup, which would probably have
been uncomfortable had any of it actually appeared on Nabiki.
Which it hadn't.
Ooooooops.
Instead, Nabiki's original attire reformed as a scattered pile of clothes
in roughly the area she was in, give or take the radius of a ten foot
dome centered on the now normal girl.
Definitely need some practice there.
Shan Pu's pack, which had been ready to go for several weeks now,
was easily ten times as massive as she could have previously carried.
Perhaps unsurprizingly, most of the additional weight was comprized
Neither of these words are spelled with a 'z'.
reinforced with, of all things, jade and granite, and were surprisingly
comfortable despite their clunky and rigid appearance. The pants were
short, ending halfway down her thighs, and the shirt was also a
sleaveless, abriviated affair that left her midriff bare. Both articles
sleeveless, abbreviated
had raised trim and decorative designs that felt like immovible stone
immovable
Shan Pu's skin was currently a deep nut tan and her hair and eyes had
both become a rich deep brown that most in the village likened to
chocolate and one jeoulous warrior had called mud.
jealous
Emphisizing her thoughts, Shampoo hammered a tree with her fist
emphasizing
as she marched briskly past it, only to be surprized at the loud crack
You need to break your 'z' key or something. Seriously.
R'hul decided to take a break from the monster movie marathon and
was currently examining itself in the bathroom mirror, pondering how
best to disguise itself. It's build was already mostly male, although
Stray apostrophe there.
Genma approached the door with no small amount of trepedition in
trepidation
"Genma?" Nodoka asked. "Is that you?"
"No-chan," Genma began, "I have much to tell you..."
Kinda saw this coming.
As R'hul slowly decended into quivering madness, its chief minion
came in with some more ketchup for his Master and wondered why
R'hul was watching My Neighbor Totoro...
Heh.
SPECIAL TREAT - FFML EDITION:
Shan Pu as a magical girl - Two pics
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Girl_Shampoo.jpg
http://www.forsaken-innocence.com/images/mgart/Magical_Girl_Shampoo_Bust.jpg
Doesn't quite suit her as well as it does the others...
Okay! I'll do C&C for the next seven chapters tomorrow. Very good stuff so
far, and I'm eager to read more!
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