Angus MacSpon wrote:

Okay, if nobody else is going to say a word ...

I have to say that this was one of the funniest stories I've read in a long
time.  Congratulations, and I hope you continue this.

Okay, so there are a lot of really, really silly springs here.  But your
story acknowledges this, at least, and let's face it, it's not as though
Takahashi didn't do much the same thing herself, when she felt like it.
(Taro, anyone?)

Going through the story again, I somehow find it impossible not to read every
one of Mousse's lines aloud, in a James Earl Jones voice.  I'm not 100% sure
what Ukyo's turned into (some reference I didn't recognise), but 
it's, er, fascinating. ^_^  And Akane as a Valley Girl promises 
delicious chaos.

Only real problem I can see is that all your ellipses (...) have come through
as garbage characters.  When writing fanfic, it's generally best to turn the
autocorrection OFF in whatever word processor you're using.

It was okay, but for silly springs, nothing
beats Gregg Sharp's Thousand Acre Omake.

http://www.asynjor.com/fanfic/sharp/s9132_omake.txt

Now THERE is a funny, delightful, silly story
with unusual springs.

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