More delayed C&C.
Standard C&C Disclaimer: All the below is my only occasionally useful
humble opinion, my only occasionally correct grammatical and spelling
corrections, and/or my only occasionally funny humor.
Krista Fisk wrote:
Hi all. Just a couple of notes. This fic can be considered a companion
piece to my other Final Fantasy VII fanfic, All But Blood, which can be
found at my website at http://www.akane.org/fanfiction/.
Special C&C Disclaimer: I am not familiar with All But Blood; do forgive
any deficiency in the C&C resulting from that.
Zack Forrester. SOLDIER 1st Class under the command of General Sephiroth in
the ShinRa Company's military. He said goodbye to me in this garden of
blooming daffodils on the rise overlooking my mother's house, kissed the
tears from my closed eyes, my cheeks, my lips, and promised to return as
soon as the mission was over.
That was five years ago.
Nice opening.
At first, I searched for him. I combed the net for any news of his mission
to the little mountain town of Nibelheim on the western continent, but there
was nothing.
...the net? Maybe some of the more recent material added it, but FFVII'
world never really struck me as having an Internet. *shrug*
Murdered. I couldn't see him, I could only feel.
Should be a semi-colon after him, I believe.
Hmm... wound up not having much in particular to say, but I didn't catch
any other errors or find any places where I saw obvious grounds for
improvement, and my comedic muses can be terribly inconsistent. I
enjoyed reading it, and I'll be keeping an eye out for more and probably
checking out that "All But Blood" you mentioned when I have the time.