[FFML] [C&C] [Gantz] Point Total

[DB Sommer]

Farzad Mansouri wrote:

>ROFL holy cow this was funny! 
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Thanks. Tis the nature of the spamfic, to be certain.

> On with the critique!
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>DB Sommer <sommert at connecttime.net> wrote:
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>>were 
>>dissected/melted/eaten by the newest wave of aliens
>>that had decided to 
>>make Japan their hangout.
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>There is the odd sentences structure like this was
>written in notepad without textwrapping and then
>pasted into an email looks odd in places.
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% Hmm. Could be the slashes I used, since i'm pretty sure most of it 
should have been Word plaintxt

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>>for freedom, 
>>short-lived as it was. He owed it to the first girl
>>to he had sex with, 
>>even if he was in love with another. Besides, all
>>freeing himself had 
>>done was got him killed.
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>Wow how depressing but that's what the show was to me
>anyway.
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% Urgh. Discount the anime ending. It was only created because the manga 
wasn't anywhere near to completion but the anime was. It's not remotely 
consistant with the nature of the series up to that point. It was 
definitely 'Quick, we have to make something up to wrap things up'. 
Given that context, it makes sense of why they did it. But Since the 
manga continues the tale, and in a much better direction, I refer to it.

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>>Second disclaimer: I don’t own any of the Dragonball
>>characters or 
>>concepts either.
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>Now thats a funny ending I loved it!  Well all in all
>it was a nice spamfic grats man and welcome back!
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% Thanks. Also gave me a chance to use a lesser written series. I like 
being a bit varied in the series I use. Admiteddly, in the past, when I 
had things like time, I could write and C+C. Now, it's highly difficult. 
I feel guilty about not being able to do either, but real life just 
doesn't let me do what I'd like. Maybe if I hit the next powerball, 
things will be different, but until then I must work and try to keep my 
life together, like every other working schmoe out there.

% And thanks for the C+C. It's appreciated.

DB Sommer

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