[FFML] [Ranma] Life is Complicated, Part II

[John Allen delos Santos]

It was a good start...  despite the errors that Lurker mentioned Chapter 1 started out as an interesting premise...  It didn't turn out so well in this chapter.  One thing that bothered me was that in the middle of this chapter the new characters took over and a feel of 'Author Insert Fic' began to make itself known.  You might wanna give less screen time to your new characters, as per your heading this is a Ranma fanfic not a who knows who else is there fanfic.

My two cents on the matter

Jiro Maeda

       
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