[FFML] [Fanfic][Draft1][Marvel][Chapter 1] Ultimate Boom Boom

[skychan]

Well my first thought is that I love it.  It's an interesting combination,
you've managed to work in the back history for your alternative world well,
without too much in any one spot, and slipped in a couple little sub plots
all at once.  It's just funny enough without going slapstick, and the way
it ended is excelent.

Really I think you have a very good start for a fun story here.  I don't
have very much to critisize about it, or sugestions for improvements.
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